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My american lit. paper (please help if your bored)



 
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NotMcBallin



Joined: 10 Apr 2010
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PostPosted: Sat Apr 10, 2010 8:26 pm    Post subject: Reply with quote

first paragraph, you started 3 sentences in a row, with campbell, gets repetetive try something else like instead of..

Campbell writes, as his memoir begins, that he is being held captive in a prison in Israel awaiting trial for crimes he committed during World War Two.

As Campbell's memoir begins, he is being held captive in a prison in Israel where he awaits trial for crimes that he commited during World War II.

The rest of the paragraph is very well written.

paragraph 2,
Itís the large part of every man that wants to hate without limit, that wants to hate with god on its side. <- well said.

p3, just a quote
p4 and 5, read it thoroughly, was very smooth to read and everything flowed together very well. All in all seems like a good job, Probably wouldnt worry about changing anything.
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